The first time that my father touched my shoulder
학생이 쓴 원문
I can\'t remember exactly, but there was one time that I studied English and math a lot which I have to do in a week. It was my father\'s homework. When my father looked at amount of studied things that I did, he touched my shoulder, and he smiled. I think it was the first time that my father praised me. In the case of my father, he doesn\'t be satisfied with anything easily. Because of it, I think that I studied a lot, so I satisfied my father. At that time I think me that, \'I am very good boy\'.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Daniel! Thank you for doing your homework on a weekend. I hope you had a wonderful Seollal with your family.
P.S. Please take note of the corrections. Remember
to use pronouns to replace nouns in your sentences.
- Teacher Debbie
>> I can\'t remember exactly, but there was one time that I studied English and math hard for a week.
It was my father\'s homework.
>> It was my homework from my father.
When my father looked at amount of studied things that I did, he touched my shoulder, and he smiled.
>> When my father saw how much I studied, he touched my shoulder and smiled.
I think it was the first time that my father praised me.
>> I think it was the first time that he praised me.
In the case of my father, he doesn\'t be satisfied with anything easily. Because of it, I think that I studied a lot, so I satisfied my father.
>> He doesn\'t easily get satisfied, so I think that is the reason I study a lot.
At that time I think me that, \'I am very good boy\'.
>> When I do, I feel like I am a very good boy.
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