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2012-09-06 · 첨삭 강사 Lara

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yesterday, I went to the catholic church for practicing dance. sometiems we can get a lot of stress from surrouding people but sometimes we can get much energy from people. Before, I don't like to spend much time with people. I think it wastes the time of mine. So, my family told me to go out side and meet people. You can get many things from them. At that time I din't think so. But now, I think it is very importand to interact with many different people. But of course, too much isn't good, neither. There are so many different people arround us. If we can be well with these so many people, we can go through difficult problems. Because many of things are connected with people.

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They said that \"Every person is a new door to a different world.\" I\'m glad that you made a choice of knowing people around you. Just keep on exploring things because it might lead you to where you ought to be. Teacher Lara yesterday, I went to the catholic church for practicing dance. >> Yesterday, I went to the Catholic church to practice dancing.sometiems we can get a lot of stress from surrouding people but sometimes we can get much energy from people. >> Sometimes we get stressed-out from people around us but we sometimes can get much energy from them.Before, I don\'t like to spend much time with people. >> I didn\'t like to spend much time with people before. I think it wastes the time of mine. >> I thought it\'s only a waste of my time.So, my family told me to go out side and meet people. >> So my family told me to go out and meet people. You can get many things from them. >> Correct >> or You can learn many things from them.At that time I din\'t think so. >> Correct But now, I think it is very importand to interact with many different people. >> Correct But of course, too much isn\'t good, neither. >> CorrectThere are so many different people arround us. >> Correct If we can be well with these so many people, we can go through difficult problems. >> Correct Because many of things are connected with people. >> Because many things are connected with people.

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