The frog

Hello my name is Fami. I have a frog name Ribit. I named Ribit mysilf. That because he (Ribit is a male) says Ribit all the time. I found Ribit at the lake. He was croking very painful. So I held him on my hands. Then he croked right at me. Then I saw a little splinter. So I put my hand in the frog's mouth, and I pull the splinter out. Then Ribit croked very happily to me. So I taked him to my home. And since that day he was my better newist pet. Why better? Before I got Ribit, I had lot's of pets. My first pet was a snake Wim I loved Wim very much. But one day he just disapeared. Then I had a rat. That rat didn't has a name, because I hated him. So I just throw that rat in the trash can. Aftter that day I didn't have a pet for a long time. And now I have Ribit. And he is just fine. He can do hoping, swiming, and really hanostly he can sing very beautyfuly. So I love him very much. And even he can't do anything I will love him. THE END BYE~

Hi Ji[이름]! This is such a great composition! You\'re a superb storyteller and writer! I didn\'t know you had it in you. Well done! I\'m just wondering... why did you hate that rat? What did he do wrong? Check my corrections below. Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ Hello my name is Fami. >> CORRECT! I have a frog name Ribit. >> I have a frog named \"Ribit\".I named Ribit mysilf. >> I named Ribit myself. That because he (Ribit is a male) says Ribit all the time. >> That\'s because he (Ribit is a male rabbit), says \"ribit\" all the time. I found Ribit at the lake. >> CORRECT! He was croking very painful. >> He was croaking in pain.So I held him on my hands. >> So I held him in my hands. Then he croked right at me. >> Then he croaked right at me.Then I saw a little splinter. >> I saw a little splinter inside his mouth.So I put my hand in the frog\'s mouth, and I pull the splinter out. >> I put my hand in the frog\'s mouth and pulled the splinter out.Then Ribit croked very happily to me. >> Then Ribit croaked very happily at me.So I taked him to my home. >> So I took him home.And since that day he was my better newist pet. >> Since that day, he became my new and better pet.Why better? >> CORRECT! Before I got Ribit, I had lot\'s of pets. >> Before I got Ribit, I had lots of pets. My first pet was a snake Wim >> My first pet was a snake named \"Wim\".I loved Wim very much. >> CORRECT! But one day he just disapeared. >> But one day he just disappeared.Then I had a rat. >> CORRECT! That rat didn\'t has a name, because I hated him. >> That rat didn\'t have a name because I hated him.So I just throw that rat in the trash can. >> So I just threw that rat in the trash can.Aftter that day I didn\'t have a pet for a long time. >> After that day, I didn\'t have a pet for a long time.And now I have Ribit. >> CORRECT! And he is just fine. >> CORRECT! He can do hoping, swiming, and really hanostly he can sing very beautyfuly. >> He can hop, swim, and he can even sing beautifully.So I love him very much. >> CORRECT! And even he can\'t do anything I will love him. >> Even if he can\'t do anything, I will still love him.