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Good morning Sir [이름]. Happy new day! Thanks for the effort in writing about the “Colling game” you mentioned about. This is a good way for me to help you express your thoughts in English. See you later in class!
~T. IRENE~
I would like to write about interesting game in recent Winter Olympic games in pyengchang.
>> I would like to write about an interesting sport in the recent Winter Olympic games being held in Pyeongchang.
The game is played by four players from each team on retangular ice floor.
>> The game is played by four members from each team on a rectangular ice floor.
There is a handle on top of stone that looks very heavy totaly 10 stones,and it is deliverd in the circle that located on opposite from the end of square ice floor.
>> There is a handle on top of a stone that looks very heavy. There’s a total of 10 stones and it is delivered in the circle that located on the opposite end of the ice floor.
The more the stones in the center of the circle,the higher the score.
>> The more stones in the center of the circle, the higher the score.
unfold a defence that interferes with the movement path of the stone to prevent fomation.
>> Use a defense that blocks the path of the stone to prevent formation.
The attack is to put a lot of stone in the center of the circle, and the defence is to prevent the opponent\'s stone from pushing in or out of the circle.
>> The attack strategy is to put a lot of stone in the center of the circle, and the defense is to prevent the opponent\'s stone from pushing (moving) in or out of the circle.
To do so,use a tool that looks like a cleanerof glass window to adjust the direction or speed of the moving stone That is limitted in our team\'s.
>> To do so, one uses a tool that looks like a glass or window cleaner. It will adjust or control the direction or speed of the moving stone that is limited for our team.
The winner and loser of the game depends on the technique of handling the stone and the work that blocks the attack of the opponent.
>> The winner and loser of the game depend on the technique of handling the stone and the strategies used to block the attacks from the opponent.
It seems to be a combination of golf and bowling. The name of game is curling.
>> Correct.
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