The graph of mobile phone
학생이 쓴 원문
Thank you so much always
강사 첨삭
Hi Ye [이름]!
Relevant comparisons are not limited to the data presented.
You can also present facts that can highlight the comparison.
You know that there is a rapid development when it comes to mobile phones.
You can explore this fact in your comparisons.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
The given table illustrates how many percentage of people use mobile phones in different seven
ways in three years (2006, 2008 and 2010).
>> The given table illustrates the percentage of people using mobile phones in seven different ways in three years (2006, 2008 and 2010).
People can see through the percentages that which
mobile phone features were useful for people and the percentages had increased in the period.
>> People can see through the data which mobile phone features were useful for people and the increase in usage of such.
Search the internet function was the most increased percentage within the years.
>> The use of the function of surfing the Internet had increased the most over the years.
The data was not
shown in 2006 for Search the internet, however, the percentage was 41 and 73 in 2008 and 2010
respectively.
>> There was no data available for searching the Internet in 2006, however, the percentages were 41 and 73 in 2008 and 2010 respectively.
It increased by 32 percent.
>> Correct
Record video was the second which was the increase
rapidly from 2008 to 2010.
>> Recording videos was the second where there was a rapid increase from 2008 to 2010.
The most of the percentages had risen, but the percentages of Make calls
and Play games had decreased by 1 percent from 2008 to 2010.
>> Most of the percentages had risen, but the percentages of making calls and playing games had decreased by 1 percent from 2008 to 2010.
The highest percentage of function was Make calls the whole years even though it had dropped off
in 2010.
>> The function with the highest percentage was making calls for all the years given even though there was a drop in 2010.
Send & receive text messages was the second in the period.
>> Sending and receiving text messages was the second during the given period.
Take photos, Search the
internet, Play games, Record video, and Play music were the order after the second.
>> The order for the others goes taking photos, searching the Internet, playing games and playing music.
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