The Great Korean

2010-08-31 · 첨삭 강사 Jammie

학생이 쓴 원문

It is a long day. ^^(i do hate the firstday of everyweek...haha^^;; Today, i told you about The General Lee Soon Shin who saved the our beautiful country. After class off, i thought The Great man in KOREA history for a while. The Great king of Sejong, he made a KOREAN in period of CHOSUN. As you might be aware, Ji-[이름] Park, Chan ho Park, two guys are famous person in field of sport. to change the point, i want to know about your Hero. Let me know about that. As you know, NICK KUN, member of 2PM(Famous IDOL STAR) is a Pilipino. Ok. It is a tenish. I have to go to a bed. See you tomorrow morning.BYE~

강사 첨삭

Hi there Nick! I want to hear more about your hero. Come to think of it, I really have not thought about my own hero. (kkk) ^.^

Here are your corrections.

It is a long day.

>>correct!

^^(i do hate the first day of every week...haha^^;;

>>correct!
Today, i told you about The General Lee Soon Shin who saved the our
beautiful country.

>> Today, I told you about General Lee Soon Shin who saved our beautiful country.

After class off, i thought The Great man in KOREA history for a while.
>> After class, I thought of the Great man in Korean history for a while.
The Great king of Sejong, he made a KOREAN in period of CHOSUN.
>> The Great king of Sejong, during the Chosun period.
As you might be aware, Ji-[이름] Park, Chan ho Park,

>> correct!

two guys are famous person in field of sport.

>> these two guys are famous in the field of sports.
to change the point,

>> To change the subject,
I want to know about your Hero. Let me know about that.

>> correct!

As you know, NICK KUN, member of 2PM(Famous IDOL STAR) is a Pilipino.

>> correct
Ok.

>>correct

It is a tenish. I have to go to a bed.

>> It's ten-ish. I have to go to bed.
See you tomorrow morning.BYE~

>> correct

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