The greatest lesson I\'ve got last year(2)

2020-01-27 · 첨삭 강사 Eve

학생이 쓴 원문

Also, I don\'t have enough power to study because I ran in the first semester. Eventually, I used to fall in sleep when I studied Korean every morning. Through this experience which many Korean students face, I realized that staying healthy is really important to study or work. The difference between the first semester and the second semester was my health. I used all the energy I had in the first semester. To improve my health for my second semester, I should have enjoyed other hobby rather than watching Youtube videos late at night. If I did Pilates and slept early for my health, perhaps I could have studied for a long time and get a better score. Even though I didn\'t achieve what I have wanted, I convince that I can do better next time. If I have any chance to prepare a big exam, I will focus on balance between studying and staying healthy.

강사 첨삭

Balancing both your studies and health definitely is the right thing to do.

I was balancing my work and studies back when I was a student and it was hard, but doable. 

So Aja aja! I believe you can do it.

~Teacher Eve.   

Also, I don\'t have enough power to study because I ran in the first semester.

>> Also, I don\'t have enough power to study because I was a runner in the first semester.

>> OR: Also, I don\'t have enough energy to study because I was a runner in the first semester.

Eventually, I used to fall in sleep when I studied Korean every morning.

>> Eventually, I used to fall asleep when I studied Korean every morning.
 Through this experience which many Korean students face, I realized that staying healthy is really important to study or work.

>> Through this experience that many Korean students are facing, I realized that staying healthy is very important for study or work.

The difference between the first semester and the second semester was my health.

>> Correct!

I used all the energy I had in the first semester.

>> Correct!

To improve my health for my second semester, I should have enjoyed other hobby rather than watching Youtube videos late at night.

>> To improve my health for my second semester, I should have enjoyed my other hobbies rather than watching Youtube videos late at night.

If I did Pilates and slept early for my health, perhaps I could have studied for a long time and get a better score.

>> Correct!
 Even though I didn\'t achieve what I have wanted, I convince that I can do better next time.

>> Even though I didn\'t achieve what I have wanted, I am convinced that I can do better next time.

If I have any chance to prepare a big exam, I will focus on balance between studying and staying healthy.

>> If I have any chance to prepare for a big exam, I will focus on balancing both my studies and staying healthy.

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