The greatest lesson I\'ve got last year(2)
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Balancing both your studies and health definitely is the right thing to do.
I was balancing my work and studies back when I was a student and it was hard, but doable.
So Aja aja! I believe you can do it.
~Teacher Eve.
Also, I don\'t have enough power to study because I ran in the first semester.
>> Also, I don\'t have enough power to study because I was a runner in the first semester.
>> OR: Also, I don\'t have enough energy to study because I was a runner in the first semester.
Eventually, I used to fall in sleep when I studied Korean every morning.
>> Eventually, I used to fall asleep when I studied Korean every morning.
Through this experience which many Korean students face, I realized that staying healthy is really important to study or work.
>> Through this experience that many Korean students are facing, I realized that staying healthy is very important for study or work.
The difference between the first semester and the second semester was my health.
>> Correct!
I used all the energy I had in the first semester.
>> Correct!
To improve my health for my second semester, I should have enjoyed other hobby rather than watching Youtube videos late at night.
>> To improve my health for my second semester, I should have enjoyed my other hobbies rather than watching Youtube videos late at night.
If I did Pilates and slept early for my health, perhaps I could have studied for a long time and get a better score.
>> Correct!
Even though I didn\'t achieve what I have wanted, I convince that I can do better next time.
>> Even though I didn\'t achieve what I have wanted, I am convinced that I can do better next time.
If I have any chance to prepare a big exam, I will focus on balance between studying and staying healthy.
>> If I have any chance to prepare for a big exam, I will focus on balancing both my studies and staying healthy.
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