The hardest job: house wife
학생이 쓴 원문
I think housewife is the most hardest job. Its purpose is not for money. It\'s just for family. I\'ll cite two reasons why it is the hardest job.
First, It doesn\'t have any holiday. Housewife have to work every day. For example, in New Year\'s Day, housewife have to work for food and treat visitors to many foods. So they doesn\'t have perfect holiday.
Second, they have to do every housework. It looks like easy, but it\'s very hard actually. They work for family\'s comfort. If they aren\'t family member, the families can\'t keep anymore.
However, my mom said, she thinks if she works hard, her family members can be happy and comfortable. She also thinks if she take care of her children, she is happy with her great adult children.
강사 첨삭
I think housewife is the most hardest job.
>> I think being a housewife is the hardest job.
First, It doesn\'t have any holiday.
Second, they have to do every housework.
However, my mom said, she thinks if she works hard, her family members can be happy and comfortable.
Its purpose is not for money.
>> This is a good sentence!
It\'s just for family.
>> It\'s just for the family.
I\'ll cite two reasons why it is the hardest job.
>> This is a good sentence!
First, It doesn\'t have any holiday.
>> First, it doesn\'t have any holiday.
Housewife have to work every day.
>> Housewives have to work every day.
For example, in New Year\'s Day, housewife have to work for food and treat visitors to many foods.
>> For example, in New Year\'s Day, housewives have to cook and treat visitors to a lot of food.
So they doesn\'t have perfect holiday.
>> So they don\'t have a perfect holiday.
Second, they have to do every housework.
>> Second, they have to do every housework.
It looks like easy, but it\'s very hard actually.
>> It looks easy, but it\'s actually very hard.
They work for family\'s comfort.
>> They work for their family\'s comfort.
If they aren\'t family member, the families can\'t keep anymore.
>> If there weren\'t housewives, there wouldn\'t be families.
However, my mom said, she thinks if she works hard, her family members can be happy and comfortable.
>> However, my mom thinks that if she works hard, her family members can be happy and comfortable.
She also thinks if she take care of her children, she is happy with her great adult children.
>> She also thinks that if she takes care of her children, she will be happy when they become adults.
Hi, Daniel! Keep on writing to enhance your writing skills. Great job right here!
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