The holidays should have be more, or less?
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Perhaps, to be more holiday has its advantage, but i prefer to be less holidays. A human being has to need regularly rest time and adequate holidays give us a fresh health condition. It also help giving some new idea when you working. In South Korea, there are many people, have worked over in 8hours as five times on week without no sleep in the mid-day. In addition they have holidays only weekend. They always endure the hard time on their own. It may cause inadequate affect to company, because fatigue can ruin one’s efficiency. I think, if the holiday is to extend albeit one more day, and even maintaining salary. I’m sure that It’ll be more bright society.
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Hi [이름] [이름]!^^
I agree to your opinion that we need adequate rest period and we can achieve this if we can have an additional holiday at work.^^
Always,
Kelly^^
Perhaps, to be more holiday has its advantage, but i prefer to be
less holidays.
>> Perhaps, to have more holidays has advantages but I prefer to have less holidays.
A human being has to need regularly rest time and
adequate holidays give us a fresh health condition.
>> A human being needs regular rest time and adequate holidays give us a the chance to rejuvenate our mind and body.
It also help giving
some new idea when you working.
>>It also helps us think of new ideas that could contribute to the success of the company.
In South Korea, there are many people,
have worked over in 8hours as five times on week without no sleep in the
mid-day.
>> In South Korea, there are many people who work for eight hours a day, five times a week without taking afternoon nap.
In addition they have holidays only weekend.
>>In addition, they can only rest on the weekend.
They always
endure the hard time on their own.
>> Correct.
It may cause inadequate affect to
company, because fatigue can ruin one’s efficiency.
>> It may have a bad effect to the company because fatigue can ruin one\'s efficiency.
I think, if the
holiday is to extend albeit one more day, and even maintaining salary.
I’m sure that It’ll be more bright society.
>> I think, if we will have more holidays with pay, I\'m sure that we will have a brighter society.
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