The homework for 16th May.
학생이 쓴 원문
Q : What would your ideal house or apartment look like?
A : My ideal house is a very huge apartment.
As i am living in one room, i want to live in a huge house. Also, i want to live in a new-built house. Since a house that i lived previous was a old house, it had many defects. So, i want to live in a huge and new built apartment.
강사 첨삭
Hello Eddy!
Thank you for sharing your ideas! You described your dream home well. Just a quick tip: try to use more natural word choices like “large” instead of “huge” in formal writing, and watch word forms like “newly built” instead of “new built.” Great job—keep practicing!
~~Teacher Kate
>>CORRECT!
>>OR: My ideal house is a very large apartment.
As i am living in one room, i want to live in a huge house.
As i am living in one room, i want to live in a huge house.
>>As I am living in a one-room place, I want to live in a spacious home.
Also, i want to live in a new-built house.
>>Also, I want to live in a newly built house.
Since a house that i lived previous was a old house, it had many defects.
>>Since the house I previously lived in was old, it had many defects.
So, i want to live in a huge and new built apartment.
>>So, I want to live in a large, newly built apartment.
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