The homework for 2/16 : money or enjoy?
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Hello there,
Taking time to learn more about grammar could broaden your knowledge.
Give yourself to learn more and give yourself to remember all the things you\'ve learned.
Have a nice day at work,Oh!!!
T. Jeny
Friend Jeny.
>>correct
I repeatedly remember the corrections you did in the every class, nevertheless i often do same mistakes.
>>I always remember the corrections you do in our class everyday, nevertheless, I repeatedly do the same mistake.
I am likely to be a poor pupil, friend?
>>correct
I am very busy now just like yesterday , so I will just see you tomorrow.
>>correct
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the topic for today is very difficult to express.
>>It is very difficult to express myself about our topic today.
In the past, Mental thing was prior to money, but now money is more getting important.
>>In in the past, being intelligent was prior to money, but now money is becoming more important.
Nowadays money is becoming a new power and basis of happy or unhappy.
>>Nowadays, money is getting a new power and it is a basis of happiness.
I think it is not desirable.
>>correct
While enjoying our job, if we make a money , It will be the best way.
>>On the other hand, if we ejoy and make money at the same time, it will be the bast way.
it is true that we need money to eat, wear, sleep, be educated, etc.
>>It is true that we need money to eat, clothes, sleep, be educated and etc.
In short, nowadays money needs for doing our all activities both physical and mental.
>>In short, we need both physical and mental capability to earn money
But the money must be made by clean and fair means, only then we will be happy.
>>But money must be made through a clean and a fair way, then we will be happy.
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