The homework for 25th March.
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강사 첨삭
Hi Eddy,
Your answer is good because you gave a clear example of how younger and older generations think differently about work. Connecting it to social media discussions also makes it relatable.
To improve, try explaining more about why younger generations think differently. For example, you could mention how work-life balance, company loyalty, or workplace culture have changed. Adding more details will make your answer stronger.
You\'re on the right track! Keep practicing, and try to expand your thoughts step by step.
~Teacher Cathy
In my opinion, younger generations in Korea have a different view.
>>CORRECT
OR>>In my opinion, younger generations in Korea have a different perspective.
As i am also younger generation, I think differently compared to my managers.
>>As I am also part of the younger generation, I think differently compared to my managers.
They think that salesman always need to wear a suit.
>>They believe that salesmen should always wear a suit.
But I think except for the time meeting other people, salesman don\'t need to wear a suit.
>>However, I think that except when meeting clients, salesmen don’t need to wear one.
Also, in many SNS contents, Koreans always talking about a difference between younger generations and older generations.
>>Also, in many SNS posts, Koreans often talk about the differences between younger and older generations.
Especially about a difference of thinking.
>>Especially about their difference of thinking.
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