The homework for 4/15: eaasy; qualities of politician
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Firstt of all, I am sorry for the trouble today.
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An emergency event was occurred this morning.
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Good politician should be for the people basicaly, if not so, they are only politicoes, and they are harmful to people and country.
>>A good politician should basically be for the people, if not so, they are only politicians, they are harmful to the people and to the country.
In addition to this, they are apparently to have the ethical conviction.
>>In addition to this, they apparently have ethical convictions.
In case of the April 13 general election in Korea, ruling party \"SAENURI\", \"new world\" in Korean, was shockig and humiliating defeat.
>>Last April 13, there was a general election in Korea, the ruling party, \"SAENURI\", was defeated by the \"New World\", a party in Korea. It was a shocking and humiliating defeat.
38 % of candidates have at least one count of criminal record.
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Most of candidates of the party are trashes like drunken driving, fraud, embezzlement, bribery, gambling, adultery and violence.
>>Most of candidates of the party were accused of drunken driving, fraud, embezzlement, bribery, gambling, adultery and violence.
It indeed is an assortment of crimes.
>>It is indeed an assortment of crimes.
In addition, there are habitual lawbreakers -- two candidates have 10 counts on their criminal records.
>>In addition, there are habitual lawbreakers -- two candidates have 10 counts of criminal records.
They all seem to know voters as a fool.
>>They all seem to know that voters are fools.
As result, it shows that voters did a harsh judgement and most of all are defeated.
>>As a result, it shows that the voters did a harsh judgement and most of them were defeated.
But there are still many trash politicians in Korea.
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