The homework for 4/15: essay : my most positive changes

2016-04-18 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Sam. Thanks for your praise. It is tremendous Friday, it is especially right for you and me. These day i am not satisfied with my ratio of class attendance. I could not take a class due to frequent meeting but i do best if possible, you know. it is the saddest for me not to be sufficiently able to prepare, review and practice English. Have a nice weekend with your family. = body = About the my most positive changes in my life. First, I came to understand my wife. Over the past years, i didn't understand my wife well, hence we had argued each other without concession, it affected my children negatively. After my change, my house had regained peace and we all are being happy. Second, I became to exercise. In the past, I worked hard, after working, i frequently drank alcohol, and i just slept or became a couch potato weekend or holiday. But from about 10 years ago, i have exercised regularly, it was real rest and i keep retaining my good body and shape. I am very happy to exercise.

강사 첨삭

Hello Oh,

Hello! How are you feeling today? Well, thank you for sending this is.

Here is a thought that you may ponder on:

\"The object of education is to prepare the young to educate themselves throughout their lives.

In our daily activities, we can learn new things.

Preparing yourself with all the challenges in life is just a trial for you to move forward.

In this way, you will find yourself, knowing that you\'ve learn a lot.\"

T. Jeny

 

Sam.

>>correct
Thanks for your praise.

>>correct
It is tremendous Friday, it is especially right for you and me.

>>It is a tremendous Friday, especially for both of us.
These day i am not satisfied with my ratio of class attendance.

>>These days, I am not satisfied with my phone class\' attendance.
I could not take a class due to frequent meeting but i do best if possible, you know.
>>I could not take a class due to my frequent meetings but I will still do my best.
it is the saddest for me not to be sufficiently able to prepare, review and practice English.

>>I feel sad to insufficiently prepare, review and practice English.
Have a nice weekend with your family.

>>correct

= body =
About the my most positive changes in my life.

>>About the most positive changes in my life.
First, I came to understand my wife.

>>correct
Over the past years, i didn\'t understand my
wife well, hence we had argued each other without concession, it affected my children negatively.

>>Over the past years, I didn\'t understand my wife well, hence we had arguments without concession, which affected my children negatively.

After my change, my house had regained peace and we all are being happy.
>>After that change, we regained peace and happiness at home.
Second, I became to exercise.

>>Second, I begun  to exercise.
In the past, I worked hard, after working, i frequently drank alcohol, and i just slept or became a couch potato weekend or holiday.

>>After working hard, I frequently drink alcohol and just sleep or just be a couch potato on the weekends or on holidays.
But from about 10 years ago, i have exercised regularly, it was real rest and i keep retaining my good body and shape.

>>But for about 10 years from now, I\'ve been exercising regularly to keep my body in good shape.
I am very happy to exercise.

>>correct

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