The implication of having an aging population.
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We talked about this issues at the class on March 28 :)
>> CORRECTBut I want to express my opinions more.
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>> However, I would like to share more of what I think.
The increasing of population the elderly and decreasing of birthrate are very serious social issues in Korea.
>> The increase in the elderly population and the decrease in birthrate are very serous social issues in Korea.I think aging phenomenon in Korea is serious when I realized that amount of my pension will be small after retirement even if I pay a lot of pension premium :(
>> I think the aging phenomenon in Korea is serious. I realized that the amount of my pension will be small after my retirement, even if I pay the premium. :(But I think Korean government don\'t try to make fundamental solutions.
>> But I think the Korean government doesn’t think about this and doesn’t try to find fundamental solutions.
I was very shocked that government announced a policy of hiring foreign domestic workers to solve the low birthrate!
>> CORRECTIn Korea, gender salary gap is the most severe among the OECD countries and the unemployment rate of women is higher than that of men.
>> In Korea, the gender salary gap is the most severe among the OECD countries, and the unemployment rate of women is higher than that of men.
Also I think that the social atmosphere in which husbands don\'t help with childcare is one of the key reasons of for the decline in birth rates.
>> Also, I think that the social atmosphere in which husbands don\'t help with childcare is one of the key reasons for the decline in birth rates.Therefore, I insist the fundamental solution of increasing birthrate is improving Korean\'s gender sensitivity.
>> Therefore, I insist the fundamental solution to increasing birthrate is improving Korean\'s gender sensitivity.
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