The importance between money and knowledge.
학생이 쓴 원문
I think acquiring money is much more important than acquiring
knowledge. Most of the knowledge that we are acquiring is the
knowledge to earn money. While we are learning that knowledge
we spend time and that is a wate of time.
If we have money, we can learn what we really want.
None of the konwledge that is connected with earning money.
So if we have money, we can live our own life.
강사 첨삭
Hi!
You did a good job in writing this! I agree with you that a lot of people these days think that way. I hope you'll have a nice evening!
-T. May-
I think acquiring money is much more important than acquiring knowledge.
>>Correct
Most of the knowledge that we are acquiring is the knowledge to earn money.
>> Most of the knowledge that we are acquiring is the knowledge we can use to earn money.
While we are learning that knowledge we spend time and that is a wate of time.
>> While we are learning that knowledge we waste our time.If we have money, we can learn what we really want. >>CorrectNone of the konwledge that is connected with earning money.>> None of the knowledge is connected with earning money.So if we have money, we can live our own life.
>> So if we have money, we can live our own lives.
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