The importance of freedom.
학생이 쓴 원문
Dear. Selene
Freedom is very important for me.
Because freedom give me good energy.
Our life is choice all that eveytime.
Choice be given to freedom.
Thank you.
강사 첨삭
Happy Monday, [이름]!^^
I\'m happy to read your composition. Just continue practicing your grammar writing. ^_^
Freedom is very important for me.
>>>CORRECT!
Because freedom give me good energy.
Because freedom give me good energy.
>>> It\'s because freedom gives me good energy.
Our life is choice all that eveytime.
Our life is choice all that eveytime.
>>>Life is a choice to everyone.
OR>>> Life is a matter of choice
Choice be given to freedom.
Choice be given to freedom.
>>> Choice can give us freedom.
OR>>> We have the freedom of choice.
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