The influence of social networking system.
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Nowadays, users of social networking sites based on the Internet are significantly increasing. It made people share their opinions in a more opened setting, express themselves and creat new trend. The best thing is that the public can select what they want to read or see, which was impossible when we didn't have the Internet. At that time, it was fairly easy to manipulate people because they couldn't get much of information. However, there is a side effect of the social networking system. That is there are still some people who are not alert of figuring out the information's credibility and they just aborb false information with thinking twice. As long as the public try to be critical in order to get right things, the system will influence a positive effect on the society
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Hello [이름],
We talked about this in our class already, but it's good practice that you also see to it that you write it down as well. Keep up the good work.
-RJ
Nowadays, users of social networking sites based on the Internet are significantly increasing.
>>correct
It made people share their opinions in a more opened setting, express themselves and creat new trend.
>>It makes people share their opinions in a more opened setting, express themselves and create new trends.
The best thing is that the public can select what they want to read or see, which was impossible when we didn't have the Internet.
>>correct
At that time, it was fairly easy to manipulate people because they couldn't get much of information.
>>At that time, it was fairly easy to manipulate people because they couldn't get other sources of information.
However, there is a side effect of the social networking system.
>>correct
That is there are still some people who are not alert of figuring out the information's credibility and they just aborb false information with thinking twice.
>>There are still some people who are not keen on figuring out the information's credibility, and they just absorb false information with thinking twice.
As long as the public try to be critical in order to get right things, the system will influence a positive effect on the society.
>> As long as the public tries to be critical in order to get the right things, the system will have a positive effect on the society.
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