The Internet has done more harm than good. Agree or not?

2018-07-11 · 첨삭 강사 Rosie

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I personally think that the internet has both good and bad sides. It brings us convenience but negative effects at the same time, especially for teenagers. However, I disagree that the internet has done more harm than good. It depends on the person who uses but as long as we use the internet in an appropriate way, the internet may not be harmful to anybody. Moreover, using the internet has become part of our daily life and we can do anything with this such as business, education or any other works. In other words, the existence of the internet is inevitable considering how fast modern life is.

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I personally think that the internet has both good and bad sides.

>> CORRECT

It brings us convenience but negative effects at the same time, especially for teenagers.

>> It brings us convenience and negative effects at the same time, especially for teenagers.

However, I disagree that the internet has done more harm than good.

>> CORRECT

It depends on the person who uses but as long as we use the internet in an appropriate way, the internet may not be harmful to anybody.

>> It depends on the person who uses it but as long as we use the internet in an appropriate way, the internet may not be harmful to anybody.

Moreover, using the internet has become part of our daily life and we can do anything with this such as business, education or any other works.

>> CORRECT

In other words, the existence of the internet is inevitable considering how fast modern life is.

>> CORRECT

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