The investigation for the elevator accident 2

2016-03-11 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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And The boss in my office wanted to listen to the opinion current big issue. It is obvious that accident was passenger’s fault. He should have hug his pet in the elevator. And the comments and regulation about a pet are written in the elevator. But the problem was that the passenger who was cut off his finger didn’t recognized his fault. In this situation, we have no choice but to follow the law about the elevator accident. As the preliminary inspector. I suggested my opinion like that. We could just follow our standard manual we don’t need to use petty trick. Although Mess media in this town will broadcast this accident, we will have nothing to lose. And more, This accident will be a good example for the rule that passengers should keep.

강사 첨삭

And The boss in my office wanted to listen to the opinion current big issue.

>> [DO YOU MEAN]: The boss in my office wanted to listen to my opinion on the current big issue.
It is obvious that accident was passenger\'s fault.

>> It is obvious that accident was the passenger\'s fault.
He should have hug his pet in the elevator.

>> He should have hugged his pet in the elevator.

And the comments and regulation about a pet are written in the elevator.

>> The comments and rules for pets riding an elevator were posted on the walls.
But the problem was that the passenger who was cut off his finger didn\'t recognized his fault. 

>> But the problem was that, the passenger who got his finger cut off didn\'t recognize his fault. 
In this situation, we have no choice but to follow the law about the elevator accident.

>> In this situation, we have no choice but to follow the law about elevator accidents.
As the preliminary inspector. I suggested my opinion like that.

>> As the preliminary inspector, I suggested that we follow the law. That was my opinion about the matter.

We could just follow our standard manual we don\'t need to use petty trick.

>> We could just follow our standard manual and we don\'t need to use petty tricks.
Although Mess media in this town will broadcast this accident, we will have nothing to lose.

>> Although the mass media in this town will broadcast this accident, we will have nothing to lose.

And more, This accident will be a good example for the rule that passengers should keep.

>> What\'s more is that, this accident will be a good example for passengers and will serve as a reminder for them to keep the rules.

OR >> Aside/apart from that, this accident will serve as a good example to all passengers. It will be a reminder for them to always follow the rules.

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