The jobs that should be rewarded enough
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Many people try to get a \"good\" job. The salary is one of the most important elements people regard when getting a job. In Korea, doctors and people who work in a big company earn a lot of money.
I think doctos should receive a high salary. They invest their time and money a lot to become a doctor. After becoming a doctor, they work really hard to \"save\" people. They save a \"life\", so they should get enough rewards.
Firefighters or construction workers should earn a lot of money. In case of firefighters, they sacrifice their lives to \"save\" others. If they have to choose themselves or a citizen in the worst situation, they definitely prioritize the citizen.
Construction workers are in danger of sacrificing their lives. They climb higher and higher to build a beautiful building. Our cities can be brightened because of them.
All jobs I mention are related to lives. The most important value is a \"life.\" Therefore, people who save or sacrifice their lives should earn enough money.
강사 첨삭
Good piece!
I agree with your point, and here in the Philippines, farmers should also get a higher pay.
Farmers in my country are currently having a hard time and it\'s really sad.
Keep creating great compositions, [이름]!
~Teacher Eve.
Many people try to get a \"good\" job.
>> Correct!
The salary is one of the most important elements people regard when getting a job.
>> The salary is one of the most important elements people consider when getting a job.
In Korea, doctors and people who work in a big company earn a lot of money.
>> Correct!
I think doctos should receive a high salary.
>> I think doctors should receive a high salary.
They invest their time and money a lot to become a doctor.
>> They invest a lot of their time and money to become a doctor.
After becoming a doctor, they work really hard to \"save\" people.
>> Correct!
They save a \"life\", so they should get enough rewards.
>> Correct!
Firefighters or construction workers should earn a lot of money.
>> Correct!
In case of firefighters, they sacrifice their lives to \"save\" others.
>> In the case of firefighters, they sacrifice their lives to \"save\" others.
If they have to choose themselves or a citizen in the worst situation, they definitely prioritize the citizen.
>> If they have to choose between themselves of the citizen in worse condition, they will definitely prioritize the citizen.
Construction workers are in danger of sacrificing their lives.
>> Correct!
They climb higher and higher to build a beautiful building.
>> They climb high to build a beautiful building.
Our cities can be brightened because of them.
>> Correct!
All jobs I mention are related to lives.
>> All the jobs I mentioned are related to human lives.
The most important value is a \"life.\"
>> Correct!
Therefore, people who save or sacrifice their lives should earn enough money.
>> Correct!
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