The last time I went to the beach
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I went to Haeundae beach near my house with my mom about a month ago. Then the weather was great. We took a walk along the beach drinking some beverage. I played with sand a little. There were many people for Autumn. It looked like they were enjoying beautiful fall beach with mild weather. So did I. I feel like summer beach is very crowded and a bit dirty but fall beach is a lot more calm and better.
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I went to Haeundae beach near my house with my mom about a month ago.
Then the weather was great. We took a walk along the beach drinking some
beverage. I played with sand a little. There were many people for
Autumn. It looked like they were enjoying beautiful fall beach with mild
weather. So did I. I feel like summer beach is very crowded and a bit
dirty but fall beach is a lot more calm and better.
>> I went to Haeundae beach near my house with my mom about a month ago. Back then, the weather was great. We took a walk along the beach while drinking some
beverages. I played sand a little. There were many people in the Autumn season. It looked like they were enjoying the beautiful beach on the Fall season with this mild
weather. So did I. I feel like the Summer season on the beach is very crowded and a bit
dirty but Fall season on the beach is a lot more calm and better.
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