The Legend of Korea Dangoon
학생이 쓴 원문
A long time ago, God Wang woong met tiger and bear.
They wanted to be a human.
So Wang woong sad"If you eat only garlics and onions in the cave during 100days, I make you be a human!"
But tigers jumped out in the cave, but bear only eat galic and onion in the cave during 100days!
So bear became a beautiful woman and married with Wan woong
And their baby was Dangoon. Dangoon makes good country in the first time!!!
강사 첨삭
Hello there.^^
This is a very interesting story.
Thank you so much for sharing it to me.
You just have to be careful in constructing your sentences for you to clearly convey what you have to say.
Anyway, I really thank you for posting this.
This is actually a good practice for you.
Have a great day!
_T.Grace^^
A long time ago, God Wang woong met tiger and bear.
>> A long time ago, God Wang Woong met a tiger and a bear.
They wanted to be a human.
>> They wanted to become humans.
So Wang woong sad\"If you eat only garlics and onions in the cave during 100days, I make you be a human!\"
>> So, Wang Woong said, \"If you only eat cloves of garlic and onions in the cave for 100 days, I will transform you into human!\"
But tigers jumped out in the cave, but bear only eat galic and onion in the cave during 100days!
>> But the tiger jumped out from the cave while the bear stayed inside and ate garlic and onion for 100 days!
So bear became a beautiful woman and married with Wan woong
>> So, the bear became a beautiful woman and married Wan Woong.
And their baby was Dangoon. Dangoon makes good country in the first time!!!
>> And their baby was Dangoon, who made the first good country ever!!!
This is a very interesting story.
Thank you so much for sharing it to me.
You just have to be careful in constructing your sentences for you to clearly convey what you have to say.
Anyway, I really thank you for posting this.
This is actually a good practice for you.
Have a great day!
_T.Grace^^
A long time ago, God Wang woong met tiger and bear.
>> A long time ago, God Wang Woong met a tiger and a bear.
They wanted to be a human.
>> They wanted to become humans.
So Wang woong sad\"If you eat only garlics and onions in the cave during 100days, I make you be a human!\"
>> So, Wang Woong said, \"If you only eat cloves of garlic and onions in the cave for 100 days, I will transform you into human!\"
But tigers jumped out in the cave, but bear only eat galic and onion in the cave during 100days!
>> But the tiger jumped out from the cave while the bear stayed inside and ate garlic and onion for 100 days!
So bear became a beautiful woman and married with Wan woong
>> So, the bear became a beautiful woman and married Wan Woong.
And their baby was Dangoon. Dangoon makes good country in the first time!!!
>> And their baby was Dangoon, who made the first good country ever!!!
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