The major change in my life.
학생이 쓴 원문
The major change in my life is rasing children.
I had a hard time during I took care of my children.
If l didn’t have children I couldn’t be an adult.
I became brave, having patient and
I could put my self in other shoes.
강사 첨삭
Good day, [이름]ny!
That is the mystery of being a mom. We become brave for the sake of our children. Well, I guess this is the most challenging part of a woman\'s life who became a mother.
Thank you for sharing and I hope that you are learning by writing your homework. Congratulations for a job well done :)
Aki~
The major change in my life is raising children.
>>> CORRECT!
I had a hard time during I took care of my children.
>>> CORRECT!
If l didn’t have children I couldn’t be an adult.
>>> CORRECT!
I became brave, having patient and I could put myself in other shoes.
>>> I became brave and patient and I could put myself in other shoes.
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