The meaning of Having children to me.

2021-11-27 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I had a child a year after I got married. It would have been nice if the honeymoon was a little longer, but I always wanted to have a child. It was so tired and difficult that I didn\'t know how I lived for 100 days after I had my first child. It was also my first time raising a child, so I and my wife were clumsy and difficult. My parents were also far away, so I had a hard time physically and mentally because I couldn\'t get help. However, by the time the child grew up and had a second child, I had the know-how of it and became more and more relaxed. However, I was always worried that they would get hurt while raising them, and I had a little other concern about studying and doing more things I wanted to do. Still, I am so happy that my family is doing their best every moment to make pleasant memories every week.

강사 첨삭

Hi Evan:)

I think your family is very wonderful. Having children may be hard, but everything is worth it until the end. You guys have a very strong relationship with one another. I hope this won\'t change even if they are already grown-ups. 

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I had a child a year after I got married. 
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It would have been nice if the honeymoon was a little longer, but I always wanted to have a child.
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It was so tired and difficult that I didn\'t know how I lived for 100 days after I had my first child.
>> I was so tired. The experience was so difficult. I don\'t even know how I lived for 100 days after I had my first child. 

It was also my first time raising a child, so I and my wife were clumsy and difficult. 
>> It was also my first time raising a child, so me and my wife were clumsy. 

My parents were also far away, so I had a hard time physically and mentally because I couldn\'t get help.
>> CORRECT

However, by the time the child grew up and had a second child, I had the know-how of it and became more and more relaxed.
>> However, by the time our child grew up and had  our second child, we already know the basics so we felt more relaxed. 

However, I was always worried that they would get hurt while raising them, and I had a little other concern about studying and doing more things I wanted to do.
>> However, I was always worry that they would get hurt while we were raising them. I had a little concern about studying and doing more things that I wanted to do.

Still, I am so happy that my family is doing their best every moment to make pleasant memories every week.
>> CORRECT

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