the meaning of my birthday
학생이 쓴 원문
I think my birthday is quite important and meaningful.
For me, my birthday is just a day of birth, but when I was young, I always wanted to be congratulated and given gifts by my family or friends.
However, my idea have changed a little since I was in my 30s.
This is because it was a hard day for my parents to make me in the hospital.
Whenever my birthday approaches, I am grateful for my parents\' dedication and love.
So, on my birthday, I call my parents first to thank them.
This is because the place where they live is far away.
I was able to learn these meaningful thoughts from my wife.
Usually, on birthdays, my family usually ate out or gathered together to have a simple party at home before COVID-19.
강사 첨삭
Hi Evan:)
Birthdays are great. It\'s a day meant to celebrate your existence in this world.
Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.
I think my birthday is quite important and meaningful.
>> CORRECT
For me, my birthday is just a day of birth, but when I was young, I always wanted to be congratulated and given gifts by my family or friends.
>> For me, my birthday is just a day of birth, but when I was young, I always wanted to be congratulated and be given gifts by my family or friends.
However, my idea have changed a little since I was in my 30s.
>> However, my idea has changed a little since I was in my 30\'s.
This is because it was a hard day for my parents to make me in the hospital.
>> This is because it was a hard day for my parents to give birth of me in the hospital.
Whenever my birthday approaches, I am grateful for my parents\' dedication and love.
>> Whenever my birthday approaches, I feel grateful for my parents\' dedication and love.
So, on my birthday, I call my parents first to thank them.
>> CORRECT
This is because the place where they live is far away.
>>This is because they live far away from me.
I was able to learn these meaningful thoughts from my wife.
>> CORRECT
Usually, on birthdays, my family usually ate out or gathered together to have a simple party at home before COVID-19.
>> Usually, on birthdays, my family eats out or gather together to have a simple party at home before COVID-19.
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