The meaning of volunteering for me
학생이 쓴 원문
Avoiding challenging will be able to block me from growing up and getting more mature since I will lost the opportunites I can learn from the fail experiences. Meanwhile, I started to volunteer to teacher middle school students. I wouldn't have tried to teach English if I hadn't read the article since I think my English is not the best and good enough to make money. However, I tried this in order to recover my weakness that I noticed lately. Second, I have been thinking that I really need to distribute to the society because I'm a social person and I got help from other social members everyday. For example, I use the subway everyday and the subway is being operated by many people. In addition, I walk clean roads, take buses, and somebody take my trash.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
It’s good that you are interested in taking part of the society. You have a good heart to be thinking of what others do for you and I’m also glad that you appreciate what they do. Take care! ^_^
Avoiding challenging will be able to block me from growing up and getting more mature since I will lost the opportunites I can learn from the fail experiences.
>> Avoiding challenges for me will become a barrier for my growth and maturity because I believe that I can learn from my mistakes or experiences.
Meanwhile, I started to volunteer to teacher middle school students.
>> Anyway, I started to be a volunteer teacher to middle school students.
I wouldn't have tried to teach English if I hadn't read the article since I think my English is not the best and good enough to make money.
>> I wouldn't have tried to teach English if I hadn't read the article since I think my English is not that good enough to make money.
However, I tried this in order to recover my weakness that I noticed lately.
>> However, I tried this in order to overcome my weaknesses that I noticed lately.
Second, I have been thinking that I really need to distribute to the society because I'm a social person and I got help from other social members everyday.
>> I have also been thinking that I really need to contribute to the society because I'm a social worker and I got help from others everyday.
For example, I use the subway everyday and the subway is being operated by many people.
>> For example, I use the subway everyday because it is being used by many people.
In addition, I walk clean roads, take buses, and somebody take my trash.
>> In addition, I also walked on clean roads, take the bus and others would also clean my trash.
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.