The memory that I can’t forget in my life

2021-02-08 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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The memory that I can’t forget in my life is when I say fireflies at Kota Kinabalu. We go into the river with a boat and when our guide illuminate trees fireflies were shining very brightly. It was really beautiful and me and my mom cried. I don’t know I why cried but I felt weird. It was touching and I don’t want to forget this memory.

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The memory that I can’t forget in my life is when I say fireflies at Kota Kinabalu. 
>>The memory that I can’t forget in my life is when I saw fireflies at Kota Kinabalu. 

We go into the river with a boat and when our guide illuminate trees fireflies were shining very brightly. 
>>We go into the river with a boat and when our guide illuminate trees, fireflies were shining very brightly. 

It was really beautiful and me and my mom cried. 
>>CORRECT

I don’t know I why cried but I felt weird. 
>>CORRECT

It was touching and I don’t want to forget this memory.
>>CORRECT

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