The methods that I can improve the World

2016-12-06 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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There are many kinds of things that I make the world improve even though I am a small person. Those are like this ; Don'k leave food, don't throw away the trash on the ground, doing separate collection well, pull off the electronics that we don't use, switch things that we don't need etc. I'd like to explain switching things in more detail. My students and I switched things that we don't need any more last Thuesday. We brought many kinds of things. Those's state were good. First, each of us arranged goods neatly. We checked them here and there, Finally we started to haggle with things that we want to switch. It was really fun and beneficail. My students were really enjoyed the time. We make a flea market in my apartment every year. From children to old people join the event enthusiastically. I hope many people to concern the world problem and try to solve it.

강사 첨삭

Wow Miss [이름], you impress me!
You are such a very good teacher because you were sharing your knowledge to your students too.

Two thumbs up for  a job well done.

I hope you will keep up the good work.

Call you then again.

Take care and have a good night!

xoxoTeacher Cam

There are many kinds of things that I make the world improve even though I am a small person.

>>I can do many things to make the world a better place.

Those are like this ; Don\'k leave food, don\'t throw away the trash on the ground, doing separate collection well, pull off the electronics that we don\'t use, switch things that we don\'t need etc.

>>correct

I\'d like to explain switching things in more detail.

>>correct

My students and I switched things that we don\'t need any more last Thuesday.

>>My students and I switched things that we no longer need last Tuesday.

We brought many kinds of things.

>>correct

Those\'s state were good.

>>Their condition was still good.

First, each of us arranged goods neatly.

>>correct

We checked them here and there, Finally we started to haggle with things that we want to switch.

>>correct

It was really fun and beneficail.

>>It was really fun and beneficial.

My students were really enjoyed the time.

>>My students really enjoyed their time.

We make a flea market in my apartment every year.

>>We tend to have a flea market in my apartment every year.

From children to old people join the event enthusiastically.

>>correct

I hope many people to concern the world problem and try to solve it.

>>I hope many people will be concerned with the world issues and try to solve them.

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