the most attractive personality trait

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Being optimistic and calm is the top personality trait i aspire to.

>> Being optimistic and calm is the top personality trait that I aspire.

There are many appealing characteristics such as being responsible, being adventurous or being independent.

>> There are many appealing characteristics such as being responsible, adventurous or independent.

>> OR: There are a lot of great attitude such as being responsible, adventurous or independent.

Even so, the reason why i consider optimism as the most attractive personality because i believe optimists are the happiest people in the world.
>> Correct

>> OR: Even so, the reason why I consider being optimistic is the most attractive personality because I believe that having that kind of attitude will make us the happiest person in the world.

With a positive attitude, your life becomes happier and more successful.

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>> OR: With a positive outlook in life, you will be happier and more successful.

In my case, I am quite a worrying type, sometimes very vulnerable, pessimistic unnecessarily.

>> In my case, I am quite the worrying type of person. Sometimes I am unnecessarily vulnerable and pessimistic,

>> OR: In my case, I am quite the worrying type of person. I am sometimes vulnerable and unnecessarily pessimistic.

These can negatively affect my mental and physical health.

>> Correct

>> OR: These factors can negatively affect my mental and physical health.

That is why i am trying to be positive, strong and relaxed no matter what happens.

>> Correct

>> OR: That\'s why I am trying to be positive, strong and relaxed no matter the situation is.

It is not easy but not impossible.

>> Correct

With this homework, i thought of how to take active steps to become the person i want to be.

>> With this homework, I was able to know how to take active steps to become the person I want to be,

>> OR: With this homework, I was able to come up with strategies that will help me to become a better person.

Hanging out with someone who has positive personality can help me to adopt upbeat attitude because positive thoughts are contagious.

>> Hanging out with someone who has a positive personality can help me adopt an upbeat attitude. Because positive thoughts are contagious.

Reading good books can be helpful.

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>> OR: Exposing myself to good literature can also be helpful.

Also laughing is the most effective measure to keep me in a good mood.

>> Correct