The most boring job.
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After doing military service, I could get a part-time job. At that time, my mother had worked a factory, she introduced me to the factory.
The factory has been producing some parts of car\'s Air conditioner. While I worked at the factory, I removed particles from a part what was cut by a machine for 8 hours every week days. It was so boring, I couldn\'t stand especially last time of every day. That period was winter season, while I was working I fired gas heater. After lunch, I dozed off. One day a manager said to me, \"If you doze one more, You
fire.\" I couldn\'t doze anymore. While I was working at the factory, I realized that it isn\'t my job. I have to study hard to get my ideal job.
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After doing military service, I could get a part-time job.
>>> After doing military service, I want to get a part-time job.
At that time, my mother had worked a factory, she introduced me to the factory.
>>> At that time, my mother had worked in a factory, so she recommended me to work in the factory.
The factory has been producing some parts of car\'s Air conditioner.
>>> The factory has been producing some parts of cars\' air conditioner.
While I worked at the factory, I removed particles from a part what was cut by a machine for 8 hours every week days.
>>> My main job in the factory is to remove particles from a part that was cut by a machine for 8 hours every weekday.
It was so boring, I couldn\'t stand especially last time of every day.
>>> It was so boring that I couldn\'t stand especially the last time of every day.
That period was winter season, while I was working I fired gas heater.
>>> That period was the winter season, while I was working I accidentally fired a gas heater.
After lunch, I dozed off. One day a manager said to me, \"If you doze one more, You fire.\"
>>> After lunch, I dozed off. One day a manager said to me, \"If you doze off one more, you fire.\"
I couldn\'t doze anymore. While I was working at the factory, I realized that it isn\'t my job.
>>> I couldn\'t afford to doze off anymore. While I was working at the factory, I realized that it isn\'t the job for me.
I have to study hard to get my ideal job.
>>> CORRECT
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