The most challenging period
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It was the most challenging period of time in my life when I graduated from high school and didn’t know what to do because there was nothing clearly decided with regard to my future plan or the direction of my life. I went to the government funded technical high school specialized in Electric and was supposed to be employed, after graduation, by the Korea Electric Power Corporation which was the state run power company. But due to the imbalance in manpower supply & demand in the company, the hiring process was delayed when I graduated and I had to wait a year or longer without the employment date fixed. At first, I tried to get a job and work until I got hired by KEPCO, but it was not easy to get a decent job with my high school diploma and no job experience. I tossed and turned a few nights thinking about my life. Finally I made a decision to enter university, giving up the opportunity of being hired by KEPCO, and I studied again for a year to take the college entrance exam.
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It was the most challenging period of time in my life when I graduated from high school and didn’t know what to do because there was nothing clearly decided with regard to my future plan or the direction of my life.
>> The most challeging period of time in my life was when I graduated from highschool and I didn\'t know what to do because my plans was not yet clear regarding my future plans or the direction of my life.
>> OR: The most challenging period of time in my life was when I graduated from highschool and I didn\'t know what to do because I didn\'t have concrete plans regrading my future plans.
I went to the government funded technical high school specialized in Electric and was supposed to be employed, after graduation, by the Korea Electric Power Corporation which was the state run power company.
>> Did you mean: I went to a government funded technical highschool that specializes in Electric. I was supposed to be employed after graduation by Korea Electric Power Corporation which was the state run power company.
But due to the imbalance in manpower supply & demand in the company, the hiring process was delayed when I graduated and I had to wait a year or longer without the employment date fixed.
>> Did you mean: But due to the imbalance of manpower in the company, the hiring process was delayed when I graduated. I had to wait a year or longer for the date of employment.
At first, I tried to get a job and work until I got hired by KEPCO, but it was not easy to get a decent job with my high school diploma and no job experience.
>> At first, I tried to get a job and work until I got hired by KEPCO, but it was not easy to get a decent job with my highschool diploma and with no job experience.
>> OR: At first, I tried to get a job until I got hired by KEPCO. It was not easy to get a decent job with my highschool diploma and with no work experience.
I tossed and turned a few nights thinking about my life.
>> Correct!
Finally I made a decision to enter university, giving up the opportunity of being hired by KEPCO, and I studied again for a year to take the college entrance exam.
>> Finally, I made a decision to enter the university. I gave up the opportunity of being hired by KEPCO, and I studied again for a year to take the college entrance exam.
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