The most dangerous disease
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I think the most dangerous disease is incurable disease. And some mental diseases are not able to be cured. With a patient who ia suffering mental diseases including depression, the other members of family have a big grief and stress and they will develop the same mental problems. Actually my oldest daughter used to suffer from panic disorder. At that time it was very difficult to see her suffering the disease and I cried almost every night. In two years she was getting better.Now she is totally healthy. Through my experience, I realize some mental diseases make all the people including the patients have tough times.
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I think the most dangerous disease is incurable disease.
>> I think the most dangerous disease is an incurable disease.
And some mental diseases are not able to be cured.
>> CORRECT! With a patient who ia suffering mental diseases including depression, the other members of family have a big grief and stress and they will develop the same mental problems.
>> With a patient who is suffering mental diseases including depression, the other members of family have a big grief and stress and they will develop the same mental problems.
Actually my oldest daughter used to suffer from panic disorder.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Actually my oldest daughter used to suffer from panic attacks.
At that time it was very difficult to see her suffering the disease and I cried almost every night.
>> CORRECT!
In two years she was getting better.
>> CORRECT!
Now she is totally healthy.
>> CORRECT!
Through my experience, I realize some mental diseases make all the people including the patients have tough times.
>> CORRECT!
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