the most dangerous job
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I think one of the most dangerous job is a soldier. When country has a war, they have to fight against enemies. Nowadays, the world has been occurred lots of war.
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Hi, Sir Thomas!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
I think one of the most dangerous job is a soldier.
>> I think one of the most dangerous jobs is being a soldier.
When country has a war, they have to fight against enemies.
>> When a country is at war, they have to fight against enemies.
Nowadays, the world has been occurred lots of war.
>> Nowadays, the world has occurred lots of wars.
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