The most important room.
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, bedroom is the most important room.
Because I can take a rest there.
Most people go out for working or studying.
And then, they come back home with tired their bodies.
I think taking a rest is more important than what we can do at home.
If we sleep well, we can do everything very well.
So, in my view, bedroom has to be decorated comportably.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
It is nice to be reading your compositions again.^^
Thank you for sharing your thoughts about this topic.
I hope that you have arranged your bedroom well so as to give you more comfort every time you go home tired from work. :)
See you later in class!
-- T. Giselle ^^ ---
In my opinion, bedroom is the most important room.>> Correct.
OR>> In my opinion, the bedroom is the most important room in the house.Because I can take a rest there.
>> Correct.Most people go out for working or studying.>> Most people go out to work or study.And then, they come back home with tired their bodies.>> And then they come back home tired.I think taking a rest is more important than what we can do at home.>> Correct.
DID YOU MEAN: I think taking a rest is best done at home.If we sleep well, we can do everything very well.>> Correct.So, in my view, bedroom has to be decorated comportably.
>> So in my view, a bedroom has to be decorated comfortably.
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