The most interesting souvenir

2019-03-22 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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The most interesting souvenir which i bought is a Christmas tree ornament. I didn’t plan to buy it, even i didn’t expect to go to the Christmas gift shop. However, when i was traveling in Quebec, my friend wanted to go there. So i accepted and went there together. That shop was so beautiful. First impression that i felt is that i was overwhelmed because there are so many pretty stuffs all around the inside of the shop. Anyway, most things were too expensive in my view. Truly, if i liked to decorate the Christmas tree i would be willing to buy those things, i am not that kind of person. So i just looked around just for pleasure. However, i found something which costed only 3.3$ but it is more beautiful than other things! And at that time, i desired to buy sun catcher. Sun catcher is the ornamental article which is shining when it get sun shine. This decoration also had some glass things, so it looked like that it is enough to shine when the sunshine comes. Hence, i bought it.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]. Thank you for this. Sometimes, it\'s really interesting to find unique things in shops. I also end up buying things I didn\'t plan on buying when I go to thrift shops.

- T. Beth

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The most interesting souvenir which i bought is a Christmas tree ornament.

>>> CORRECT. (The most interesting souvenir which I bought is a Christmas tree ornament. )  

I didn’t plan to buy it, even i didn’t expect to go to the Christmas gift shop. 

>>>  I didn’t plan to buy it and I didn’t even expect to go to the Christmas gift shop. 

>>> OR:  I didn’t plan on buying it and I didn’t even expect to go to the Christmas gift shop.  
However, when i was traveling in Quebec, my friend wanted to go there.

>>> CORRECT. (However, when I was traveling in Quebec, my friend wanted to go there.  )    

So i accepted and went there together.

>>>  OR: So I agreed to go there. 

That shop was so beautiful.

>>> CORRECT.

First impression that i felt is that i was overwhelmed because there are so many pretty stuffs all around the inside of the shop. 

>>> First impression that I felt was that I was overwhelmed because there were so many pretty stuffs all around the inside of the shop.   
 Anyway, most things were too expensive in my view.

>>> OR: Anyway, most things were too expensive in my opinion.  

Truly, if i liked to decorate the Christmas tree i would be willing to buy those things, i am not that kind of person.

>>> Honestly, if I liked to decorate the Christmas tree I would be willing to buy those things, but I am not that kind of person. 

So i just looked around just for pleasure.

>>> CORRECT.

>>> OR So I just looked around for fun.

However, i found something which costed only 3.3$ but it is more beautiful than other things!

>>> However, I found something which costed only 3.3$ and it was more beautiful than other things!  

And at that time, i desired to buy sun catcher.

>>> And at that time, I desired to buy a sun catcher.  

Sun catcher is the ornamental article which is shining when it get sun shine.

>>> A sun catcher is an ornament that reflects light when hit by sun shine.  

This decoration also had some glass things, so it looked like that it is enough to shine when the sunshine comes.

>>> This decoration also has glasses in it so it reflects light when it is hit by sun shine. 

Hence, i bought it.

>>> CORRECT. (Hence, I bought it.)


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