The most memorable part of my long holiday
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The most memorable part of my long holiday is playing video games with my friends on online. And having some time with my grandparents.Because i like playing with my friends and I rarely see them unless Im not on the holiday. And with my grandparents, I have many conversations and eat delicious foods, and this moment only happens when im on the holiday.
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The most memorable part of my long holiday
The most memorable part of my long holiday is playing video games with my friends on online.
>>> The most memorable part of my long holiday was playing video games with my friends online.
And having some time with my grandparents.
>>> I also spent time with my grandparents.
Because i like playing with my friends and I rarely see them unless Im not on the holiday.
>>> I enjoy playing with my friends, and I rarely see them except during holidays.
And with my grandparents, I have many conversations and eat delicious foods, and this moment only happens when im on the holiday.
>>> With my grandparents, I have many conversations and enjoy delicious food. These moments only happen during the holiday.
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