The most unfair advantage.

2020-05-15 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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The most unfair advantage that one could possibly have is a variety of resources given by his or her parents. It is absolutely true that individuals born and raised in the uppermost economic class families have a headstart on those who weren\'t when it comes to basically every single area that affects their social lives as well as personal ones. They are highly likely to be provided with a number of opportunities, ranging from high-end commodities to education or even career-related benefits that couldn\'t have been given to them without the support from their well-off caregivers. The thing is people don\'t even notice the dramatic disparity that determines one\'s future fundamentally, since it is normally taken for granted and not questioned how just it is. Priviledge is like the air, in this respect. What makes the situation worse is the fact that social mobility is no longer possible as it was in the past, which means that the socio-economic bipolarization will be even more proliferated

강사 첨삭

Hi Drexel! Thank you for spending a little of your time on this. I really appreciate the effort! ^ ^
Definitely agree! Having well off parents is one unfair advantage a person could have. Being born with a silver spoon means a lot of privileges. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah

The most unfair advantage that one could possibly have is a variety of resources given by his or her parents. 
>>CORRECT
It is absolutely true that individuals born and raised in the uppermost economic class families have a head-start on those who weren\'t when it comes to basically every single area that affects their social lives as well as personal ones. 
>>CORRECT
They are highly likely to be provided with a number of opportunities, ranging from high-end commodities to education or even career-related benefits that couldn\'t have been given to them without the support from their well-off caregivers. 
>>CORRECT (Parents are caregivers but the term encompasses a broader idea, it would be better to use \"parents\" for this sentence.)
The thing is people don\'t even notice the dramatic disparity that determines one\'s future fundamentally, since it is normally taken for granted and not questioned how just it is. 
>>CORRECT
Priviledge is like the air, in this respect. 
>>CORRECT (*privilege)
What makes the situation worse is the fact that social mobility is no longer possible as it was in the past, which means that the socio-economic bipolarization will be even more proliferated.
>>CORRECT

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