The negative side of \"Are humans too dependent on computers?\"

2024-09-19 · 첨삭 강사 Anji

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Hello, I\'m Hana, and I\'d like to present my opinion on the topic, \"Are humans too dependent on computers?\". I think humans are not too dependent on computers. First, computers make our lives much easier. Have you ever worked with documents? If you have, can you directly calculate or memorize and execute the office work you have been doing in Excel or Word? I\'m sure you won\'t. Like this, computers are convenient for our lives because they process tasks dozens of times faster than the human brain. Second, the statement that \'people are too dependent on computers\' is an anachronistic one. People rely more on their cell phones than on computers, and computers are now used only for work such as working on documents or PPTs.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Hana! Good job today! You didn\'t only present your ideas well, but also did it in perfect grammar and spelling, Keep up the great work. See you!
--Teacher Anji


Hello, I\'m Hana, and I\'d like to present my opinion on the topic, \"Are humans too dependent on computers?\". 
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I think humans are not too dependent on computers.
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First, computers make our lives much easier. 
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Have you ever worked with documents? 
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If you have, can you directly calculate or memorize and execute the office work you have been doing in Excel or Word? I\'m sure you won\'t.
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 Like this, computers are convenient for our lives because they process tasks dozens of times faster than the human brain.
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Second, the statement that \'people are too dependent on computers\' is an anachronistic one. 
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People rely more on their cell phones than on computers, and computers are now used only for work such as working on documents or PPTs.
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