The negative side of \" Are video games good for you? \"
학생이 쓴 원문
Do you play video games? If you play, How often do you play the game? We can fall out game addiction if we play video games too much. Then, How parents can stop their children\'s game addiction? Today, I\'ll talk about this subject.
First, parents can install an app, \"Family Link\". If parents install it, they can share not only check usage time of their children\'s phone but also their location. I recommend that use this application in consultation with their children.
But more important thing that parents should do before they performance my first opinion is mediation with children. Children don\'t want to lose their right to play video games freely. So, parents should have mediation with their children first. For example, if children want to play video games 1 hours, parents can suggest them; if they play video games honestly, parents give them some snacks.
By using this ways, parents can stop their children\'s game addiction. Thank you for watching.
강사 첨삭
HI, Hannah! Great job today! I like your opinion on this matter. Keep up the great work. Let\'s discuss more in the class.
-Teacher Anji
Do you play video games? If you play, How often do you play the game?
>> Do you play video games? If you do, how often do you play games?
We can fall out game addiction if we play video games too much.
>> We can fall into game addiction if we play video games too much.
Then, How parents can stop their children\'s game addiction?
>> How can parents stop their children\'s game addiction?
Today, I\'ll talk about this subject.
>> CORRECT
First, parents can install an app, \"Family Link\".
First, parents can install an app, \"Family Link\".
>> CORRECT
If parents install it, they can share not only check usage time of their children\'s phone but also their location.
>> If parents install it, they can not only check their children\'s phone usage time but also their location.
I recommend that use this application in consultation with their children.
>> I recommend that they give consultation to their children to use this application.
But more important thing that parents should do before they performance my first opinion is mediation with children.
But more important thing that parents should do before they performance my first opinion is mediation with children.
>> But the more important thing that parents should do before they perform, in my first opinion, is mediation with their children.
Children don\'t want to lose their right to play video games freely.
>> Children don\'t want to lose their right to play video games freely.
So, parents should have mediation with their children first.
>> So, parents should have mediation with their children first.
For example, if children want to play video games 1 hours, parents can suggest them; if they play video games honestly, parents give them some snacks.
>> For example, if the children want to play video games for an hour, parents can suggest them; if they play video games honestly, parents can give them some snacks.
By using this ways, parents can stop their children\'s game addiction. Thank you for watching.
By using this ways, parents can stop their children\'s game addiction. Thank you for watching.
>> In this way, parents can stop their children\'s game addiction. Thank you for watching.
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