The negative side on \" Should students wear school uniforms? \"
학생이 쓴 원문
I\'m Hana, and I\'d like to present my opinion on the topic, \"Should students wear school uniforms?\". I can see a lot of students who wear their school uniforms. However, I heard that there are lots of students who is free in wearing school uniforms in America or European countries. I think students shouldn\'t wear school uniforms.
First, students can be exposed their per[이름]al information. Most uniforms have name tag and the logo of school on its top. It can be the cause of dangerous crime.
Second, school uniforms restrict student\'s freedom of expression. In Korea, it\'s fashion that students wear zipped hood on their uniforms. But some Korean schools restrict it. By this, students have lots of complaint on uniform rules.
In conclusion, I end my remarks by presenting my opinion, supported by reliable facts and rea[이름]s.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Hana! I want to comment you on this. You were able to present your idea clearly. The topic on uniforms have been an issue since time immemorial. At the end of the day, it is not what students wear that defines them but their eagerness and dedication to learn. See you!
--Teacher Anji
I\'m Hana, and I\'d like to present my opinion on the topic, \"Should students wear school uniforms?\"
I\'m Hana, and I\'d like to present my opinion on the topic, \"Should students wear school uniforms?\"
I can see a lot of students who wear their school uniforms.
I see many students wearing their school uniforms.
However, I heard that there are lots of students who is free in wearing school uniforms in America or European countries.
However, I have heard that many students in America or European countries are free to wear their own clothes instead of school uniforms.
I think students shouldn\'t wear school uniforms.
I think students shouldn\'t wear school uniforms.
First, students can be exposed their per[이름]al information.
First, students can have their per[이름]al information exposed.
Most uniforms have name tag and the logo of school on its top.
Most uniforms have name tags and the school logo on them.
It can be the cause of dangerous crime.
This can be a cause of dangerous crimes.
Second, school uniforms restrict student\'s freedom of expression.
Second, school uniforms restrict students\' freedom of expression.
In Korea, it\'s fashion that students wear zipped hood on their uniforms.
In Korea, it\'s fashionable for students to wear zipped hoodies with their uniforms.
But some Korean schools restrict it. By this, students have lots of complaint on uniform rules.
However, some Korean schools restrict this, which leads to many complaints about uniform rules.
In conclusion, I end my remarks by presenting my opinion, supported by reliable facts and rea[이름]s.
I\'m Hana, and I\'d like to present my opinion on the topic, \"Should students wear school uniforms?\"
I can see a lot of students who wear their school uniforms.
I see many students wearing their school uniforms.
However, I heard that there are lots of students who is free in wearing school uniforms in America or European countries.
However, I have heard that many students in America or European countries are free to wear their own clothes instead of school uniforms.
I think students shouldn\'t wear school uniforms.
I think students shouldn\'t wear school uniforms.
First, students can be exposed their per[이름]al information.
First, students can have their per[이름]al information exposed.
Most uniforms have name tag and the logo of school on its top.
Most uniforms have name tags and the school logo on them.
It can be the cause of dangerous crime.
This can be a cause of dangerous crimes.
Second, school uniforms restrict student\'s freedom of expression.
Second, school uniforms restrict students\' freedom of expression.
In Korea, it\'s fashion that students wear zipped hood on their uniforms.
In Korea, it\'s fashionable for students to wear zipped hoodies with their uniforms.
But some Korean schools restrict it. By this, students have lots of complaint on uniform rules.
However, some Korean schools restrict this, which leads to many complaints about uniform rules.
In conclusion, I end my remarks by presenting my opinion, supported by reliable facts and rea[이름]s.
In conclusion, I end my remarks by presenting my opinion, supported by reliable facts and rea[이름]s.
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