The next cutting edge technology after the smartphone
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I think the technology of smart watch get improved for replace the smartphone.
The bigger the camera of smartphone is, the heavier the weight is.
So I guess there will be demand to possess more portable smartphone.
Now people can buy merchandise who have a smart watch of Galaxy series.
So I guess the smart watch can replace smartphone.
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The smart watch already has features that the smartphone has but not totally. As time goes by, I agree that more and more Apps as well as functions will be present in the smart watch technology.
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>> I think the technology of smart watch gets improved to replace the smartphone.
The bigger the camera of smartphone is, the heavier the weight is.
The bigger the camera of smartphone is, the heavier the weight is.
>> Correct!
Or: The bigger the camera of smartphone is, the heavier the weight becomes.
So I guess there will be demand to possess more portable smartphone.
So I guess there will be demand to possess more portable smartphone.
>> Correct!
Now people can buy merchandise who have a smart watch of Galaxy series.
Now people can buy merchandise who have a smart watch of Galaxy series.
>> Correct!
So I guess the smart watch can replace smartphone.
So I guess the smart watch can replace smartphone.
>> Correct!
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