the nice place in korea.
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that Island of Jeju is the most nice place.
It's also a part of our country.
we can take the boat or plane to go there.
it's one of the most popular city to tourist.
there are the famous three things.: women, rock, windy.
as their husbands sail the sea to cath fish, they go through in danger.
Finally, wives left there alone.
that's why there are many women in je-ju.
rocks are basalt especially. jeju is made of the eruption of a valcano.
but now it's an extinct valcano.
and also it's the famous way to walk along the coast street.
it's similiar to santiago walking way in Chile.
actually i have never been to there. so i can't explain detail.
but i know it's a city of international tourist attraction.
강사 첨삭
Hello there!
After reading your composition, I felt like I wanted to go to Jeju.
I actually saw it in the a Korean drama entitled " Jewel in the Palace"
I hope to visit there with you ^^. See you on Monday!
Love,
Verna
I think that Island of Jeju is the most nice place.
>> I think Jeju island is the nicest place.It's also a part of our country.
>> Correctwe can take the boat or plane to go there.
>> Correct (just begin the sentence in a capital letter)it's one of the most popular city to tourist.
>>It's one of the most popular city among tourist.there are the famous three things.: women, rock, windy.
>> There are three famous things there: Women, rock, and wind.as their husbands sail the sea to cath fish, they go through in danger.>> When their husbands sail to the sea to catch fish, they are in danger.
Finally, wives left there alone.
>> So, the wives are left alone.that's why there are many women in je-ju.
>> Correctrocks are basalt especially. jeju is made of the eruption of a valcano.
>> Rocks are basalt because jeju was formed through volcanic eruption.but now it's an extinct valcano.
>> Correctand also it's the famous way to walk along the coast street.
>>And also it's a good way to walk along its coastal roads.it's similiar to santiago walking way in Chile.
>> It is similar to Santiago coast line in Chile.actually i have never been to there. so i can't explain detail.
>>Actually, I've never been there so I can't explain in detail.but i know it's a city of international tourist attraction.
>> But I'm sure that it is considered an international attraction.
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