The night of last day of 2010 was great.2

2013-11-18 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Many wonderful women went to inside of building. I want to talk to one of the girls, but I couldn't. She was too pretty to talk. If I knew I meet the girl, I would drees up with suit. but the past is the past, We strolled the street again. Host said that Going to Eifel tower was dangous, We decided to go some place where Eifel could be seen. Time was nearly 11:59, We settled down on the bridge. I didn't know even the name of bridge, but there were many people on there. Finally, The count was started. 10,, 9,, 8,, 7,, 6,, 5,, 4,, 3,, 2,, 1,, HAPPY NEW YEAR!!! Every people was happy. we celebrated our new year. It was first time for me to meet the new year in foreign country. It was wirred. I was happy but I missed my family concurrently. When we arrived at house, the Host gave us some shampain. We celebrated our 2010 and 2011.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!~ Thank you for sharing this wonderful experience!~I know the feeling of missing your family on a special holiday. But I do understand that it\'s once in a lifetime experience, too!~ Tell me more about it in class. See you! ~~T. Nina~~  Many wonderful women went to inside of building. >> Many/A lot of wonderful women went inside the building.I want to talk to one of the girls, but I couldn\'t.>> I wanted to talk to one of the girls, but I couldn\'t.She was too pretty to talk.>> She was too pretty to talk to.If I knew I meet the girl, I would drees up with suit.>> If I knew I\'d meet a girl, I would dress up with a suit. >> OR: If I had known that I would meet a girl, I would have dressed up with a suit.but the past is the past, We strolled the street again. >> But past is past. We strolled on the street again.Host said that Going to Eifel tower was dangous,>> The host said that going to the Eiffel tower was dangerous.We decided to go some place where Eifel could be seen.>> We decided to go to some place where the Eiffel tower could be seen.Time was nearly 11:59, We settled down on the bridge.>> The time was nearly 11:59 so we settled down on the bridge.I didn\'t know even the name of bridge, but there were many people on there.>> I didn\'t even know the name of the bridge, but there were many people there.Finally, The count was started.>>Finally, the counting started. >> OR:  Finally, the count down started.10,, 9,, 8,, 7,, 6,, 5,, 4,, 3,, 2,, 1,, HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!>> Happy New Year!^^Every people was happy. we celebrated our new year.>> Every single person was happy because we celebrated our New Year together.It was first time for me to meet the new year in foreign country. >> It was my first time to meet the New Year in a foreign country.It was wirred. I was happy but I missed my family concurrently.>> It was weird. I was happy but I missed my family at the same time.When we arrived at house, the Host gave us some shampain.>> When we arrived home, the host gave us some champagne.We celebrated our 2010 and 2011. >> We celebrated our 2010 and 2011.^^

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