The number of people with diabetes has risen from 108 million in 1980 to 422 million in 2014. In 201

2020-01-07 · 첨삭 강사 Eve

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Diabetes is a chronic disease that occurs when blood sugar (a.k.a blood glucose) levels are too high. High blood sugar for a long time might lead to diverse health problems such as stroke, heart disease and nerve damage. Therefore, we need to be cautious to prevent Diabetes and stay healthy. To prevent Diabetes, we have to understand where blood sugar comes from and how it is used for. Blood sugar comes from food, especially food that contains a lot of carbohydrates. So, one effective way to prevent Diabetes is avoiding such food including white bread, rice, cake and sweet drinks. Another effective way to reduce blood sugar is conducting physical activities since blood sugar is the main source of energy. They say that the risk of diabetes becomes higher when you have sedentary lifestyle. Reducing the portion of our meal and working out regularly are two essential methods to inhibit blood sugar rise.

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Good day!

Great composition again today, Mr. [이름], as always. Keep it up and you\'re well on your way.

Let\'s watch our health from now on as well. Diabetes is scary.

~Teacher Eve.

Diabetes is a chronic disease that occurs when blood sugar (a.k.a blood glucose) levels are too high. 

>> Correct!
High blood sugar for a long time might lead to diverse health problems such as stroke, heart disease and nerve damage. 

>> Correct.
Therefore, we need to be cautious to prevent Diabetes and stay healthy.

>> Correct.
 To prevent Diabetes, we have to understand where blood sugar comes from and how it is used for.

>> To prevent Diabetes, we have to understand where blood sugar comes from and how it is used.
Blood sugar comes from food, especially food that contains a lot of carbohydrates.

>> Blood sugar comes from food that contains a lot of carbohydrates.
So, one effective way to prevent Diabetes is avoiding such food including white bread, rice, cake and sweet drinks. 

>> So, one effective way to prevent Diabetes is to avoid food such as white bread, rice, cake and sweet drinks. 
Another effective way to reduce blood sugar is conducting physical activities since blood sugar is the main source of energy.

>> Another effective way of reducing blood sugar is by conducting physical activities since blood sugar is the main source of energy
They say that the risk of diabetes becomes higher when you have sedentary lifestyle.

>> Correct!
Reducing the portion of our meal and working out regularly are two essential methods to inhibit blood sugar rise.

>> By reducing the portion of our meal and working out regularly are two essential methods in inhibiting a blood sugar rise.




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