The older leader?

2016-07-04 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Everyone has a stubborn as you get older. Maybe this indicated the evidence that the older has a various experience of the world. Whereas they are prone to authoritarian. And also demand to obedience. Because of this, the older leader is very big to fail. The leader in 50s is the most in the world. U.S. President Obama was elected in his late 40s. People acquire skills and knowledge in their 30s. 40s have to organize in their everything. 50s display his ability and 60s have to left.

강사 첨삭

Hello sir,

Well said sir. I think leaders shouldn\'t be too old nor too young. I agree that older people tend to be authoritarian and sometimes they close their ears to the opinion of other people. See you later sir!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

 

Everyone has a stubborn as you get older.

>>Everyone gets stubborn as they get older.

Maybe this indicated the evidence that the older has a various experience of the world.

>>Maybe this is an indication or the evidence that the older people has various experience of the world.

Whereas they are prone to authoritarian. And also demand to obedience.

>>Whereas they are prone to being authoritarian. And also they demand obedience.

Because of this, the older leader is very big to fail.

>>Because of this, the older leader has a big chance to fail.

The leader in 50s is the most in the world.

>>Most leaders of the world are in their 50s.
U.S. President Obama was elected in his late 40s.

>>correct!

People acquire skills and knowledge in their 30s. 40s have to organize in their everything.

>>correct!

50s display his ability and 60s have to left.

>>correct!

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