The origine of the circus

2016-02-16 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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History of the circus. The circus is one of the oldest forms of entertainment in history. So, Today I would like to talk about the origine of the circus. The ancient Romans were the first to enjoy the circus. Around the sixth century the circus was founded in Rome as a venue for public entertainmnet mostly chariot races which were a popular spectator sport. England was one of the first nations to embarce the modern circus. During the late 1700s an Englshman named Philip Astley founded the first modern circus. He was a skilled rier who invented stunt riding on horseback. He performed his stunts in a circus ring.After his act became popular in London, He was asked to perform in Frace. He later expanded his act to include clowns, acrobats and parades of trained animals. The last addition to his act was slaptick humor. During the early 1800s the United Stated took to the circus quickly after learning of its popularity in Europe.

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History of the circus.

>> History of circus.
 The circus is one of the oldest forms of entertainment in history.

>> correct!
 So, Today I would like to talk about the origine of the circus.

>> So today, I would like to talk about the origin of circus.
 The ancient Romans were the first to enjoy the circus.

>> correct! 

Around the sixth century the circus was founded in Rome as a venue for public entertainmnet mostly chariot races which were a popular spectator sport. 

>> Around the sixth century, the circus was founded in Rome as a venue for public entertainment mostly chariot races which was a popular spectator sport. 
 England was one of the first nations to embarce the modern circus.

>> correct!  
 During the late 1700s an Englshman named Philip Astley founded the first modern circus.

>> correct!  (Englishman)

>> or: During the late 1700s an English named Philip Astley founded the first modern circus. 

He was a skilled rier who invented stunt riding on horseback.

>> He was a skilled rider who invented the stunt riding on horseback. 

He performed his stunts in a circus ring.

>> correct!  

After his act became popular in London, He was asked to perform in Frace.

>> correct!   (France)

He later expanded his act to include clowns, acrobats and parades of trained animals.

>> correct!

The last addition to his act was slaptick humor. 

>> correct!
 During the early 1800s the United Stated took to the circus quickly after learning of its popularity in Europe.

>>  During the early 1800s the United Stated took  the circus quickly after learning of its popularity in Europe.

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