The pat

2010-09-20 · 첨삭 강사 Monica

학생이 쓴 원문

I've been living alone for four years. So sometimes I feel lonely and become depressed.And every time which I feel lonely, I want to raise pat such as puppy and cat. I already raised puppy when I was a middle school student, although I couldn't raise that so far.At that time, I didn't know how to raise a pat, also the puppy was so weak to raise strongly. Thus, to raise a puppy was too difficult. On the other hand, the puppy was so cute not to feel hard to raise. although my pat was too small, it was so diligent.So she always follwed me by her short and small legs.These were really pretty. I couldn't forget it. I want to raise other pat again, then,I want to stroll with her.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! I hope that you are having a great Monday.  You are right!  Pets are fun to be with and if you are looking for a real friend, your best option is to own a pet.  See you later! Monica I've been living alone for four years. >>>correct So sometimes I feel lonely and become depressed. >>>correct And every time which I feel lonely, I want to raise pat such as puppy and cat. >>>Every time I feel lonely,  I feel like I wanted to raise a pet such as puppy or a cat.  I already raised puppy when I was a middle school student, although I couldn't raise that so far.At that time, I didn't know how to raise a pat, >>>I already raised puppy when I was a middle school student although I'm not that familiar with raising pets.  also the puppy was so weak to raise strongly. Thus, to raise a puppy was too difficult. >>>The puppy was so weak by then thus, raising pets like puppy was so difficult. On the other hand, the puppy was so cute not to feel hard to raise. although my pat was too small, it was so diligent. >>>On the other hand, the puppy was so cute that it wasn't that hard to raise it.  Although my pet was too small,  it was so diligent. So she always follwed me by her short and small legs.These were really pretty. >>>So she always followed me by her tiny legs.  These were really pretty. I couldn't forget it. I want to raise other pat again, then,I want to stroll with her. >>>I always remember her that's why I wanted to raise a pet againand stroll with her.

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