The performance of staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company. What can compani
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First, they should take good care of the welfare of their staffs to do increase staff productivity such as exercise facilities or cafes.
i think they can be good shelters for employees to work.
Second, bonuses should be paid according to employees\' performance. They will increase the will of the employees.
Last, companies will have to keep their employees on time to get off work.
강사 첨삭
Hi So [이름]!
Below, you have to look at the expressions more carefully.
There\'s a time and place for everything, they say.
It\'s the same thing in writing.
There is a right expression for every situation.
Go ahead and learn the ones I have provided below.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
First, they should take good care of the welfare of their staffs to do increase staff productivity such as exercise facilities or cafes.
>> First, they should take good care of the welfare of the staff to increase productivity such as providing exercise facilities or cafes.
i think they can be good shelters for employees to work.
i think they can be good shelters for employees to work.
>> I think they can be good places for employees to work.
Second, bonuses should be paid according to employees\' performance.
Second, bonuses should be paid according to employees\' performance.
>> Second, bonuses should be given according to employees\' performance.
They will increase the will of the employees.
>> This will give more motivation to the employees.
Last, companies will have to keep their employees on time to get off work.
>> Last, companies will have to give more freedom for their employees to get off work on time.
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