The place that I want to celebrate my next birthday
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I want to celebrate my next birthday in my house. First of all, my house is clean, cozy as well as safe so it is the best place to have my birthday party. And my friends like to play in my house. Secondly, there is a computer so I can play video games with my friends. In addition I have some toy guns and something to play like cubes and Lego so my friends and I would have so much fun. Lastly, my mom would make a lot of delicious foods for my birthday party. I am already looking forward to it.
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I want to celebrate my next birthday in my house. First of all, my house
is clean, cozy as well as safe so it is the best place to have my
birthday party. And my friends like to play in my house. Secondly, there
is a computer so I can play video games with my friends. In addition I
have some toy guns and something to play like cubes and Lego so my
friends and I would have so much fun. Lastly, my mom would make a lot of
delicious foods for my birthday party. I am already looking forward to
it.
>> I want to celebrate my next birthday in my house. First of all, my house
is clean and cozy as well as safe so it is the best place to have my
birthday party. My friends like to play in my house. Secondly, there
is a computer so I can play video games with my friends. In addition I
have some toy guns and something to play like cubes and Lego so my
friends and I would have so much fun. Lastly, my mom would make a lot of
delicious foods for my birthday party. I am already looking forward to
it.
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